1. Recipient and copy list
Think about your recipient - MP, MSP, official, ombudsman, teacher, doctor etc?
Consider copying in local politician, or chief executive of the relevant organisation
2. Subject heading
Grab attention
Key-words (e.g. autism, ADHD, discrimination)
Mark as high importance or urgent
3. Who am I?
Introduce yourself at the outset - don’t make them wait until the end of the email.
Explain why you have an interest in the issue. Are you a parent? Carer? Concerned member of the public?
4. Why am I writing to you?
Question? Complaint? Request? Apology? Giving feedback?
Why that person - local MSP? Relevant chief executive? Your child’s teacher?
5. Describe the problem
If appropriate, mention anything that is going well before launching into the problem - make a “shit sandwich”
Give a basic summary of what your issue is.
Only give details which are relevant to the situation.
Keep it clear, simple and concise.
6. Why am I entitled not to experience this problem?
Is someone breaking the law?
Is your child being discriminated against?
Are there relevant rights?
Is there relevant guidance?
Is it a question of morals or basic fairness?
7. What do I want you to do about my problem?
Do you want them to answer any questions?
Do you want them to take specific action?
Do you want them to apologise?
Do you just want them to listen?
Do you want a meeting?
8. When do I want you to do it?
Always give a deadline, even just for the initial response.
Very urgent - “by return” (i.e. as soon as they receive it)
Urgent - 48 hours
Less urgent - 7 - 10 working days
9. What am I going to do if you do/don’t do it?
Tell them how you will show appreciation if they do what you have asked them to do.
Tell them how you will respond if they do not do what you have asked them to do.
10. Next steps and sign-off
Ask them to acknowledge receipt
Explain any actions that you will take in the meantime
Any words of thanks/gratitude you wish to add (if applicable)